Extra Credit Blog-Five Part Paragraph

I needed to focused more on my transitions and my commentary in this five part paragraph assignment because I knew that I could have done better on those things in my last paragraph.  My paragraph is smoother than my last one was, because I used better transitions and introduced my ideas in better ways.  My word choice was also stronger this time because I knew that I used a lot of weak words in my last paper.  Since my commentary included a lot of plot summary and was kind of repetitive in my last paragraph, I made sure to only include new ideas and not talk about everything that was happening in the poem this time around.